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Cj
when: 2005-07-14 16:12
what: TWW - Thoughts
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This snippet is the second in the Thoughts series - just short drabbles from different povs. This one is from Abbey's perspective.


I have grown accustomed to the feel of the ring on my finger. The yellow gold blends into my skin, marks me as a married woman with responsibilities and loyalties - traits I have always admired within myself. But even though I have worn the metal band for years, she is the first time it has acted as a cool reminder of what I cannot have.

Her allure is stronger than the connection which exists in the never-ending circle, her consideration warms me in ways his shelter never could.

To him, the ring is a symbol of our union, a remembrance that I am his angel, so I do not remove the halo as I taste her lips. I allow it to serve as my punishment for committing an unforgivable sin.
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janevok: cj/abbey - by the_great_maker
who: [info]janevok
when: 2005-07-15 10:43 (UTC)
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Keyword:cj/abbey - by the_great_maker
oooooo v nice - of course i'm imagining CJ's lips being the ones she tastes ;)
(don't ruin my fantasy now!)

one thing, the last part of the 1st para "she is the first time it has acted as a cool reminder of what I cannot have", should the word she be there? to me it doesn't make sense, should it have been 'this' or am i just missing something?

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Chandra
who: [info]sassymouth
when: 2005-07-15 14:49 (UTC)
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Actually, the "she" refers to C.J., who is the first person Abbey has ever met who caused her (Abbey) to regret being married. Hence, the ring being a reminder that Abbey can't have C.J.

If it doesn't work, I need to change it. Let me know.

Oh, yeah, the lips - definitely C.J. ;)
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janevok
who: [info]janevok
when: 2005-07-15 15:00 (UTC)
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i thought the "she" was refering to CJ, but I can't make the sentence make sense in my head - if your happy with it pls just ignore me :)

i really like this, it shows how tormented Abbey is and that she's not just doing it (tasting CJ's lips) for fun....yep i like it - but then i like everything you write.

which reminds me i must get the first couple of eps of TBJ so i can read your TBJ fic. have you done any csi fic?
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Chandra
who: [info]sassymouth
when: 2005-07-15 18:57 (UTC)
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No, really, I need to work on the sentence if it's not making sense. I sometimes forget that people can't read my mind. I always need you to tell me when something needs to be changed. Believe me, I appreciate it. ;)

And thank you...Abbey's voice is harder for me, so I'm glad you could hear it in this snippet. I really don't believe Abbey would lead C.J. on for fun.

I have two published CSI fics. Both on are on Passion and Perfection as well as my site. Warning: They're not very good.

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janevok
who: [info]janevok
when: 2005-07-16 09:49 (UTC)
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You find Abbey's voice hard? but it's always been spot on in your fics and this one IMHO is the best so far - so your only going to get better (yes I am paying you lots of compliments so you keep writing her ;) )

I've book marked your CSI fics, I want to read them once I know the characters.
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Chandra
who: [info]sassymouth
when: 2005-07-18 15:37 (UTC)
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Extremely hard. In the beginning, it took me weeks to gain the courage to post any part of the Repetition series. I didn't want to do a sequel to Broken Record because I didn't want to write Abbey's voice. Hopefully, I've gotten better, but she's still the one I worry over. This piece surprised me because I didn't think about it as much as I usually do.

Thank you, by the way, for all the compliments. ;) My ego is well-stroked now.

Don't rush to read my CSI fics. There are others available that are much better.
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janevok: allison janney smile - By princess_laur
who: [info]janevok
when: 2005-07-30 11:06 (UTC)
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Keyword:allison janney smile - By princess_laur
did you know about this community: [info]stockaholics ?
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Chandra: TBJ
who: [info]sassymouth
when: 2005-07-30 22:31 (UTC)
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Keyword:TBJ
Awesome. Thank you! Although the group seems a little...odd..., it has some great pics. I look forward to looking at some of the links available.
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Sash
who: [info]sash__sweetie
when: 2008-11-26 04:42 (UTC)
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"I allow it to serve as my punishment for committing an unforgivable sin" --> I LOVE this line.
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Cj: C/A by indigo
who: [info]shonn
when: 2008-12-20 21:15 (UTC)
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Keyword:C/A by indigo
Thank you. :-)
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